Original: Gee says that “You are either in it or you’re not” regarding Discourses. (Pg 5). This is not especially true because there are many Discourses you can fake your way into. And you don’t have to be fully “in it” to make yourself “in” that Discourse. You can just make yourself feel powerful and fake it from there.
Edited: Gee says that “You are either in it or you’re not”, or it seems that way to him at least, regarding Discourses. (Pg 5). However, there are many Discourses you can fake your way into. And you don’t have to be fully “in it” to make yourself “in” that Discourse. You can just make yourself feel powerful and fake it from there.
Explanation: I changed this because I wanted to make my argument stronger without using “This is especially true because…”. Now the reader knows what my point of view is but he doesn’t have to listen to me state it in the way where it is obvious I’m showing my opinion.
Original: I agree with Cuddy on many different levels and believe one can “Fake it til [they] make it”. Cuddy integrates her idea into talking about job interviews and says: “What do you do before you go into a job interview? You do this. You’re sitting down. You’re looking at your iPhone — or your Android, not trying to leave anyone out. You’re looking at your notes, you’re hunching up, making yourself small, when really what you should be doing maybe is this, like, in the bathroom, right?” (13:31).
Edited: Anyone who is familiar with entering secondary Discourses should agree that one can “Fake it til [they] make it”. Cuddy integrates her idea into talking about job interviews and says: “What do you do before you go into a job interview? You do this. You’re sitting down. You’re looking at your iPhone — or your Android, not trying to leave anyone out. You’re looking at your notes, you’re hunching up, making yourself small, when really what you should be doing maybe is this, like, in the bathroom, right?” (13:31).
Explanation: I think this strengthens my claim. Readers get bored when they constantly see “I agree” or “I believe that”. So, the reader can still understand what I am saying without getting tired of the same phrases and losing interest. Also, I don’t have to bring up Cuddy in that sentence because I bring her up in the next. It is an overall better topic sentence that strengthens my argument.
Original: Gee says that Discourses can often conflict, but this is not really an option if one fakes it in each Discourse they need to.
Edited: Contrary to Gees belief, Discourses cannot conflict as one can fake it into every Discourse they need to.
Explanation: I did this because I can just as clearly state my opinion with this better word choice. The reader will understand that I do not agree with Gees idea that Discourses can conflict.
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